各位同仁，幫我看看，哪些不好，之前的開(kāi)發(fā)信不好，我借鑒了別人的一些意見(jiàn)，可是發(fā)現(xiàn)，效果還是不好，不知道哪里出了問(wèn)題………………我是做電子類產(chǎn)品滴
Dear
Thanks for your time to read my E-mail.
Glad to know you are in the market for electronic components.
Xinlongweiye Technology Co.,Ltd trading here,exporting semiconductors and electronics components, such as Integrated circuits, Diodes, Relays, Switches, Resistors, Capacitors etc.
The main brands :Microchip,Focus,AD,MAXIM,Infineon,TI,LT,ONS,Cypress etc.
We establish business with reliable OEMs,and directly cooperate with Microchip and Focus agents.
We enjoy great reputation from USA,Japan,Russia,Korea and other countries to the partners.
Wish our products will be helpful for your business.
Dear sir,
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From the internet ,I get the information you are in urgent need of xxxxxx.
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This?is a manufacturer of the items in 30 years. With our own factory, we can serve you with competitive price and reliable quality.
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Looking forward to hearing?your early reply, and it's my honor to be on your service.
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Regards
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Sven
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?這是我寫的開(kāi)發(fā)信，希望對(duì)你有幫助。
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你說(shuō)的還是啰嗦。老外沒(méi)時(shí)間看你那堆亂78糟的。
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簡(jiǎn)單明了即可
要簡(jiǎn)潔，清楚，有針對(duì)性。
感覺(jué)有點(diǎn)多，而且啰嗦，要簡(jiǎn)短的說(shuō)出自己公司的優(yōu)點(diǎn)，能吸引客戶
